Proofreading Rivendell

[Trotter]

Hey there,

I've been enjoying Rivendell more than any other book I've read for TOR so far. I've found a few errors though, which I hope it's not too late to correct. I'm not finished reading yet, but here are the errors I've noticed. I don't remember noticing anything earlier than page 47. I'm rather sick and sleep-deprived, so I apologize if I have missed anything. After each page number, just search for the text on the same line. The following lines have the pasted error in context, then the correction.

Yours in fellowship,
Stephen "Trotter"

Page 47: "from 18 feet"
"A character failing a roll of Athletics is considered to have fallen for 9 feet (see the Falling rules on page 184 of The One Ring); unless he failed and rolled an (Eye of Sauron), in which case, the fall is from 18 feet."
Should that be "for 18 feet"? This is one I'm not sure about.

Page 48: "this lands"
"Though the Dúnedain and the High Elves of Rivendell keep a wary eye upon this lands, few ever venture that far north."
Because of the previous paragraph's last sentence, "this lands" should be "those lands" or "these lands." If the "wary eye" is only on Angmar, then "this land" would be correct.

Page 52: "was not lost"
"But the Lord of the Ringwraiths would be even more relentless to find it first, should he discover that the crown was not lost;"
That should be "was lost," shouldn't it? He wouldn't need to look for it relentlessly if it "was not lost."

Page 52: "existing ones"
"If followed, the Frozen Path connects all the watchtowers built along the Mountains of Angmar, even if to reach most of the existing ones secret tracks leaving the path must first be found and then followed."
This should be "existing ones'," because it is plural and possessive.

Page 53: "were the ice"
"But some survived, as they were hidden among inaccessible crags, or perched up on high, were the ice defended them from the anger of the Dúnedain."
This should be "where," not "were."

[Andrew]

There's still time to make changes to Rivendell before it goes to print. I don't always spot things posted here, so your best bet is to either PM them to me! Good work, though!

Cheers

Andrew

[Trotter]

Okay, Andrew. Any more such things I'll be sure to send straight to you.
Thanks, and happy to help in some small way.

[Beran]

I've noticed a few errors myself...unfortunately, I did not make note of the locations. But, I too would suggest one more run through with a proof reader before it goes to press.

[Glorelendil]

Good catches!

[Trotter]

Thanks, Elfcrusher! My mom was pretty strict about stuff like this when I was a child, but though she's originally from Colorado she now has a nearly native southern accent complete with grammatically nebulous but fun southern expressions.

I use GoodReader on my iPad and iPhone and simply started bookmarking pages with errors. I added the text errors after the page number in the default bookmark name, then when I got a little more time put them all in the post. It seems to be a good way for me to proof on the fly.

[Glorelendil]

You didn't find any of the errors I sent Andrew, and I didn't find any of yours. Which makes me wonder how many we've all missed.

[aramis]

As I noted in another thread... there are some issues with the wording of the rules for songs...

Inspiration - does that 2d allow exceeding 6 dice? Can you use a bonus die from a prep roll in the same roll that's boosted by a song inspiration?
The Songs: when PC_A writes a song... does the song belong to the Company or to the Character? (If PC_A dies, does the company get to keep using it? If PC_A leaves, and joins a new company, does he provide his songs to the new Company?)

[Andrew]

It's worth noting that both myself and the line developer/lead writer give each book a thorough copy edit, then a proofread, and we still don't catch everything. For most books, we have time between PDF release and the files going to print, so in that intervening time if anyone spots anything please do send it directly to me rather than posting about it here (PM is best - I'm much less likely to overlook it then) and we can all help make the print file perfect.