What I miss is a pregen hailing from Harrowdale, with the Ominous Blessing Virtue. It would add some more variety in such a fellowship of the same Culture. Also, I like this gothic/sinister version of the rohirrim: Robert Smith on horse.
Wulf would seem the best fitted for it, with Thuna in a close second position.
Pre-gens in Oaths of the Riddermark (typos and questions)
Re: Pre-gens in Oaths of the Riddermark (typos and questions)
And if its not too late to be of use: here are my spots for the remaining pages, including a few things that I'm not sure about on pages 125 and 126. Apologies if others have already pointed these things out. Again some of these might be because I'm not reading them right so they are only my suggestions!
Page 88 Column 2 para 6 line 5 change ‘rather’ to “whether” perhaps?
Page 93 Column 1 para 2 line 5 change “Dunlending’s village” to “Dunlending village” OR “Dunlendings’ village”
Page 94 BREAKOUT box para 1 line 2 delete ‘in’ from “in a Hazard” ; para 2 line 3 change ‘route leads’ to “route that leads”
Page 94 Column 2 para 4 line 10 delete ‘will’ and insert a comma to read ”…can be used to lift the spirits, get then moving, and help Widhem…”
Page 96 BREAKOUT box para 2 line 5 change ‘know’ to “knows”
Page 100 Column 1 para 5 line 3 ‘martial’ could be “marshal” if it means gather together.
Page 100 Column 1 para 6 line 1 add “a” before ‘massive’ to read “ a massive”
Page 111 Column 1 para 4 line 1 add “out” before ‘of’ to read “ …East has gotten out of hand.”
Page 119 BREAKOUT box para 2 line 3 change ‘form’ to “from”
Page 122 Column 1 para 1 line 2 check ‘Mildyrd’ name
Page 122 Column 2 para 4 line 1 is there a space missing between ‘If’ and ‘the’? or is just my screen resolution
Page 125
Blodred is “an” embittered rider rather than ‘and embitterd rider’
Mornun will be hiding in a ruined “village” not ‘vilage’
Maehrwyn or Meahrwyn ?
Page 126
Description of Theorl has a single letter that needs italisicing (is that a word?)
Page 88 Column 2 para 6 line 5 change ‘rather’ to “whether” perhaps?
Page 93 Column 1 para 2 line 5 change “Dunlending’s village” to “Dunlending village” OR “Dunlendings’ village”
Page 94 BREAKOUT box para 1 line 2 delete ‘in’ from “in a Hazard” ; para 2 line 3 change ‘route leads’ to “route that leads”
Page 94 Column 2 para 4 line 10 delete ‘will’ and insert a comma to read ”…can be used to lift the spirits, get then moving, and help Widhem…”
Page 96 BREAKOUT box para 2 line 5 change ‘know’ to “knows”
Page 100 Column 1 para 5 line 3 ‘martial’ could be “marshal” if it means gather together.
Page 100 Column 1 para 6 line 1 add “a” before ‘massive’ to read “ a massive”
Page 111 Column 1 para 4 line 1 add “out” before ‘of’ to read “ …East has gotten out of hand.”
Page 119 BREAKOUT box para 2 line 3 change ‘form’ to “from”
Page 122 Column 1 para 1 line 2 check ‘Mildyrd’ name
Page 122 Column 2 para 4 line 1 is there a space missing between ‘If’ and ‘the’? or is just my screen resolution
Page 125
Blodred is “an” embittered rider rather than ‘and embitterd rider’
Mornun will be hiding in a ruined “village” not ‘vilage’
Maehrwyn or Meahrwyn ?
Page 126
Description of Theorl has a single letter that needs italisicing (is that a word?)
Re: Pre-gens in Oaths of the Riddermark (typos and questions)
I agree completely. Seemed like a good way to add differentiation in a group of the same culture.Falenthal wrote: ↑Mon Nov 06, 2017 10:45 pmWhat I miss is a pregen hailing from Harrowdale, with the Ominous Blessing Virtue. It would add some more variety in such a fellowship of the same Culture. Also, I like this gothic/sinister version of the rohirrim: Robert Smith on horse.
Wulf would seem the best fitted for it, with Thuna in a close second position.
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